Three

The whine of a siren woke Greta and chased the dreams from her mind. She pulled at them fiercely, knew they were important, but they fled and she was left with memories instead: slapping raw fingers against frozen glass until the old man answered; he knew her grandmother, following the red-orange burning cigarette to a dressing room painted green, a yellow fluorescent that soured Greta's skin and stomach.

Then words, hours of words, a book of words, and only the tiniest sliver of a life.

She'd come home through the cold and dark to a colder, darker apartment. Distracted, she'd watched roaches scurry across the blue rectangle of light from the window and crawled into am unfamiliar corner to hide.

Now Greta pulled herself from the corner, encased in the cocoon of her comforter, but uncomforted.

For a moment, she stood before the one window, then she raised it and leaned out. When she opened her eyes against the wind, Greta found a woman staring up at her from the alley below. She held papers in her hands and words in her eyes, Greta thought. For a moment, the woman held Greta's startled gaze, the she moved down the alley.

Greta withdrew inside. She had some sorting to do: of belongings, purposes, emotions, memories.

2 comments:

  1. "Greta withdrew inside. She had some sorting to do: of belongings, purposes, emotions, memories."
    I liked this bit of the post a lot, it shows the complexity of the character.

    I'm curious about her past...she seems naive and new to the town, and I can't quite figure out why she is so concerned with her grandmother's past.

    The flow of the blog is excellent to read...the way you break up her thoughts and interaction with the old man is lovely. I'm interested to see where her curiosity about her grandmother will take her.

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  2. 1. the descriptions and vividness of the adjectives makes the reader see what they're reading, which is nice
    2. i'm not entirely sure whether the encounter with the old man was a dream or not, and that may need some clarification and there's a bit too much repetition, which makes this move kind-of slow
    3. i'm interested to find out why this character is so close to her grandmother and why there's so much mystery surrounding the grandmother

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